i wrote a bunch today, but haven’t published because i’m in the middle of writing it.
as i was lying in bed this morning, i thought about how what the survivors would have to say would then be parlayed into a courtroom scene, so it seemed i might as well cut to the courtroom scene instead of continuing to describe what was happening.
i don’t seem to be all that comfortable inside the characters’ heads. i’m going to have to do more of that in the rewrite.
so when i got to the computer this morning, i laid it out. laurie. cindy. gordon. then underneath these i put allen. mom. judy. for each death. and then i went and found earlier plot notes about what has to happen next, and divided them up into their respective dead people and put them underneath the sadly departed’s names. and then i sat allen and mom on the stand and wrote down what they had to say about the defendant’s relationship with the deceased, and how the lawyer twisted it – or just let them run on because both mom and allen would hang themselves on the stand, never mind helping to hang judy.
and that’s where i left it. they haven’t gotten around to rick yet. or bill. or the serial killings. or the attempted murder of a strip club full of chocolate-loving dancers and shot-up customers. that’ll take a few days to get to.
tomorrow i’ll be filling out the testimony and arranging it the way a court would handle it.
but i’m stuck there, because i don’t know how a court would handle it. for some reason, tho i’ve been called to jury duty once a year for the past ten, i never get picked, so i don’t know how they would handle calling the witnesses for a multiple murder trial. just once and run them thru all the dead? or call them for every body? let me just look it up…
okay, witnesses are only recalled to contradict earlier testimony, so it’s get the guy on the stand, run thru all the deaths, and then excuse him. that’s going to be overwhelming.
allen has to answer questions about rick, gordon, laurie, and what he saw when judy shot laurie and electrocuted gordon and poisoned cindy.
and mom has to pronounce judgment on judy’s enmity toward her siblings, as well as confirm that she watched her own daughter shoot laurie.
how can i break that up? does judy testify? does she comment mentally? do i sum things up from her viewpoint?
maybe i should leave it broken up this way, into testimony excerpts as if collecting the good bits.